Critique Edited***

Here the link to my critique of Sarah's paper. I did not realize we were supposed to give it a grade so I will gove my grade here. I think Sarah would get A- because of the wording but I think after she looked over tha; she could easily get and A or A+! I thought it had alot of great information and the pictures she choose to illustrate her point were great.

Extra Post

So I know we were supposed to make up a post to fill in for last week...I think. Anyways, I will just take a moment to say this was the hardest paper I have ever written. Trying to narrow down a topic was wretched! Once I finally narrowed I was so excited, I thought I had more then enough information to easily fill 10 pages. The longer I typed the less I was sure. After some editing and juggling I filled 11. I think writing this paper was good experience because it taught me how balance my time on large projects as well as how to do some serious research. Overall, my paper is worthy of line edit time and I hope it turns out well!

Outline

I really wanted to talk about Popular Culture in essay, so this is what I based my paper on.
Paragraph 1
-I wanted to open with a quote.
-Then I want to go to discuss my thesis.
Paragraph 2
-Here I will talk in more detail about pop culture
-what it means in each time period
-Mention the fact that all of the books come from England.
-talk about the fact that all the writers look down their nose at pop culture.
Paragraph 3,4,5
-talk about how each book approaches the idea behind pop culture.
Paragraphs 6,7,8
- give some background on each of the books.
Paragraphs 9,10,11
-for each books give details about what was going at the time that each of the books were written
- Give the history of pop culture at each of the times
Paragraphs 12,13,14
-give the details from the books about instances of pop culture
-in some of the books discuss the lack of pop culture and the reason behind the omission
Paragraphs 15,16,17
-discuss the gender in reference to culture in the books
Conclude the essay